Comic 27 - 027

7th Jun 2011, 9:32 PM in 1
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view 7th Jun 2011, 9:32 PM edit delete
This is the last page of chapter one. Next page will be a splash screen! So I may upload two pages tomorrow - the chapter 2 splash and the first page.

Light is REALLY HARD. I have a lot to learn, but one of the biggest issues is that I'm not using flat fills for my initials, so everything is painted "over the lines". I decided to go ahead and let the halos form on this page. Meh.


Prestidigititis 7th Jun 2011, 9:56 PM edit delete reply

Engrossing first chapter. The way you introduce the characters and let them fill in their own traits and quirks is probably my favorite aspect of your style of storytelling.

It kind of amazes me how much backstory you have worked out, given what you've discussed in the comments and notes. I do some writing myself, and I have worked in shallower pools; surprising myself when more of their histories show up during the process of writing. Seems like you work out a lot of that stuff ahead of time. I'm highly impressed with that.

Then mix in the really lovely art, which I can't do at all. Great start, and I'm eager to see where things go from here.
Prestidigititis 7th Jun 2011, 10:00 PM edit delete reply
"...more of their histories," where "their" refers to "characters I'm writing."

My brain is faster than pronouns.
view 7th Jun 2011, 10:02 PM edit delete reply
The whole comic is already done in terms of plotting it out and understanding the world. I don't script tightly until I actually get near the page, but I do script deeply. :)
BishopFrenzy 7th Jun 2011, 11:01 PM edit delete reply
Wow, this is really fantastic, your art's amazing! Your characters faces are so expressive, it makes the conversations very fun to read. Inspiring stuff, looking forward to more!
view 7th Jun 2011, 11:14 PM edit delete reply
That's good, since there is going to be a lot of conversation...
duLapel 8th Jun 2011, 4:36 AM edit delete reply
Overly sensitive breasts, racing thoughts, and a full moon...

The land is scrub deserts and prairies punctuated by life giving artificial lakes.... sounds like Texas 0_o

It is probable just as well that Jim limped off woodenly. Mary seems to be at the cusp of womanhood that needs a gentle and confident lover... I'm not so sure that Jim ranks well in either category.
JasperWB 8th Jun 2011, 4:39 AM edit delete reply
I like the boobs not under the shirt thing.
Iamari 8th Jun 2011, 5:34 AM edit delete reply
Hello, I have a really retarted question to ask you. Is that moon just a hologram Kiki made, or is it the real moon she threw her shirt at?
Prestidigititis 8th Jun 2011, 6:25 AM edit delete reply
@duLapel Nonsense. I had an insecure bastard for my first lover, and I turned out just fine.
kill3st 8th Jun 2011, 8:14 AM edit delete reply
I like the discussion almost as much as I dig the comic. great page, view...
view 8th Jun 2011, 12:45 PM edit delete reply
@duLapel: To be honest, it's more the neck that gets unbearable. Anyway, it's definitely the southwest. And she's a bit older than you seem to think - she'd be in college if there were such things.

@lamari: The house is a giant glass box. It's the real moon, and her shirt hits the glass wall. I hope.
duLapel 8th Jun 2011, 1:27 PM edit delete reply
view said, "...the neck that gets unbearable."
Omoshiroi desu nee... Thanks for the insight... but I wonder why that is? Cultural? Physiological? Hmmm...

@Prestidigititis I'm glad it work out for you... chemistry, go figure! Apparently I'm clueless...
Tines 28th Jun 2012, 3:39 PM edit delete reply
She moon pores unwelcome light in through the transparent wall so she throws her shirt at it in frustration. There is a street light not far from my bedroom window. Thankfully I have blinds but trying to sleep then not completely shut feels a bit like this. Why does she not order the house to make the walls opaque to shut out the light?

anyway the point is I felt connected with what is going on in this page. It wasn't just a picture it was someone experiencing something I thought I could relate to. That is not something I always feel in comics.
Lysander 30th Dec 2012, 8:47 PM edit delete reply
I like how in the last few panels the sheet makes her look like a mermaid.
mamu 21st Mar 2013, 1:10 PM edit delete reply
Aah, this is a nice find. I like the sketchiness of the art.
view 21st Mar 2013, 10:26 PM edit delete reply
Nawww 15th May 2013, 2:46 AM edit delete reply
Late to the party, but I had to point out how much you made her look like a mermaid, what with the sheets around her legs and the toplessness. Also using the word "splash" two times in the comment below. Cute ref.
view 16th May 2013, 12:08 AM edit delete reply